Song writing

There's this class that i attend, called Songwriting.
Last semester we had to write melody and make a song out, and this semester we have to learn how to write lyrics. SO as usual we have assignment for lyric writing.. and i had the perfect idea of a song.

I called it The Bird and The Fish.
It's abt a bird and a fish falling in love.. but they'll never be together, it's forbidden love, cuz the bird will never be able to swim by the fish, and the fish will never be able to fly beside the bird.
Brilliant?? :P hahaha. We had to submit our first draft, and let the whole class read watever we've done.. and they'd write comments on it.

I've only got my first verse done.. and it was like this. Don't laugh.

Verse 1
A bird is resting on a big tree by a river,
He looks down and sees a fish.
A fish is swimming in a river by a big tree,
She looks up and sees a bird.

-The End-

HAHAHA erm.. it was a last minute thing.. cuz i forgot we had to hand in our first draft that day, so.. friends will comment on watever you have.

i was so scared haha cuz i only had this much done.. then after 1 hour of commenting each other's work.. i got my paper back. Then i read my own work again, n i felt like it was kindergarten work.. ARGH i feel so stupid n childish hAHA.. but surprisingly the comments i got back were good..?? They said it's very special, and imagery. And very memorable. Hmmmmm... and one said I used animals instead of human, which is very interesting, he likes it a lot. And a whole bunch of stuff like that.

Oh well. LOL. I was stuck with ideas after i finished my first verse. Couldn't continue anymore.